Question

【題目】高中三年，你或多或少，或快或慢，在學(xué)習(xí)或生活方面，都在進(jìn)步。請你以My Progress為題，用英語寫一篇作文，給學(xué)校的英語報社投稿。

要求：1.簡要描述你的進(jìn)步及原因。

2.畢業(yè)前你下一步的打算。

3.字?jǐn)?shù)100個詞左右。

Answer 1

【答案】

Not great as it is, I’d like to share with you my progress in these three years.

To be honest, I was not so good at my study when I came to high school, often feeling tired out and at a loss. Sometimes, I was even on the point of giving up. However, my change happened when my teachers as well as my classmates came to encourage me one day in Senior Two. It was their encouragement and my own thinking that resulted in my slow but steady progress.

Still not a top student as I am now, I have found myself filled with confidence and power to face any difficulty and challenge. There is no denying that I am bound to fight for my dream to the end in the following months!

【解析】

試題分析：注意條理要清晰，邏輯順序和結(jié)構(gòu)要恰當(dāng)，同時要盡量保持簡潔精干的內(nèi)容，不拖泥帶水。要注意題中所給的信息，不可偏題，注意格式。盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。

【亮點分析】

文章第一句是as引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句，將形容詞提前要用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)：形容詞 + as + 主語 + 系動詞。Not great as it is, I’d like to share with you my progress in these three years. 盡管不是很了不起，我愿意與你分享這三年來我的進(jìn)步。 第二段第一句是一個when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句To be honest, I was not so good at my study when I came to high school, often feeling tired out and at a loss. 老實說，當(dāng)我剛剛升入高中的時候我的學(xué)習(xí)并不是很好，經(jīng)常會感到精疲力盡和失落。第三句也是一個when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句However, my change happened when my teachers as well as my classmates came to encourage me one day in Senior Two. 然而，當(dāng)我上二年級的時候，我的老師和同學(xué)們都來鼓勵我，這使我開始改變了。第二段最后一句是一個強調(diào)句It was their encouragement and my own thinking that resulted in my slow but steady progress.正是他們對我的鼓勵以及我自己的想法導(dǎo)致了我緩慢、卻穩(wěn)定的進(jìn)步。第三段第一句依然是一個讓步狀語從句，副詞still提前要用倒裝：Still not a top student as I am now, I have found myself filled with confidence and power to face any difficulty and challenge. 雖然我現(xiàn)在還不是班上的尖子生，但是我充滿了自信和力量去面對任何困難和挑戰(zhàn)。最后一句是一個同位語從句There is no denying that I am bound to fight for my dream to the end in the following months!不可否認(rèn)，我一定要在接下來的幾個月內(nèi)為我的夢想奮斗到底。文章中運用了多個從句，同時還使用了一些很好的短語和結(jié)構(gòu)。如第二段中的to be honest老實說；on the point of doing正在做某事； as well as 也；result in導(dǎo)致。