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7．目前，就業(yè)形勢越來越嚴(yán)峻．就業(yè)壓力不僅是大學(xué)生無法回避的事實(shí)，也是高中生需要考慮的問題．就此你校編輯部開展了一次題為"就業(yè)危機(jī)對高中生的啟示"的英語征文活動．請你根據(jù)以下提示，寫一篇征文，闡明你的觀點(diǎn)．
1、努力學(xué)習(xí)，拓寬知識面；
2、發(fā)展才能，提高個人素質(zhì)；
3、加強(qiáng)合作精神，培養(yǎng)團(tuán)隊(duì)意識；
4、了解社會需求，做好人生規(guī)劃；
5、你的觀點(diǎn)…
注意：1、詞數(shù)120左右；
2、可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3、文章開頭已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
As we all know，the employment situation is getting more serious now．Being high school students，what can we learn from it？
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．寫作時首先要仔細(xì)審題，確定人稱，時態(tài)，文體．內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要全面，上下段要使用連接詞做到連貫．我們在寫作中應(yīng)當(dāng)遵循語言表述的經(jīng)濟(jì)原則，即用盡可能少的形式表達(dá)盡可能多的語義內(nèi)容，力求簡潔精練．根據(jù)提綱的提示，寫出所列要點(diǎn)，要全面．我們在用詞上應(yīng)該仔細(xì)揣摩，準(zhǔn)確清晰地表達(dá)我們的思想，剔除冗詞贅語，使文章言簡意賅．
重點(diǎn)短語和句型：
more and more serious 越來越嚴(yán)重
to start with 首先
put one's heart into 全心投入
achieve one's goals 實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)
cooperate with 合作
It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society．
句中it作形式主語，真正的主語是后面的that從句．
learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do，for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly．
句中l(wèi)earning to cooperate with others是動名詞短語作主語；we must do修飾名詞thing，是一個定語從句，省略了連詞that；for連接原因狀語從句．
we'd better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands．
句中meet后接what連接的賓語從句．
I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed．
think后接的賓語從句中，only加狀語提前，句子要部分倒裝．

解答 What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
     As we all know，the employment situation is getting more and more serious now．Being high school students，what can we learn from it？【提出問題】
     To start with，we should put all our heart into study to broaden our knowledge in various fields．It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society．（高分句型一） Additionally，learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do，for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly．（高分句型二）Last but not least，as young generation in China，we'd better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands．（高分句型三）【具體做法】
     At present，I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed．（高分句型四） I'll spare no effort to study hard to accomplish my goal．【表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)】

點(diǎn)評 書面表達(dá)題考查的是英語的應(yīng)用能力．寫作時要注意：要點(diǎn)的提煉要全；關(guān)鍵短語和句型要寫對；過渡詞和過渡短語要自然，通順地道；最后還要注意人稱和時態(tài)使用要正確．