Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是李華。請(qǐng)寫信向外教Mr. Brown介紹你校新建的陽(yáng)光健身中心，并邀請(qǐng)他周末一起來鍛煉健身。內(nèi)容包括：1.開放時(shí)間；2. 健身項(xiàng)目；3. 服務(wù)設(shè)施；

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；開頭已給，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

參考詞匯：

陽(yáng)光健身中心Sunshine Health Center； 有氧運(yùn)動(dòng) aerobic exercise;

保齡球bowling； 專業(yè)的professional; 教練coach

Dear Mr. Brown,

I’m Li Hua. I’m writing to tell you something about our newly-built Sunshine Health Center.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr. Brown,

I’m Li Hua. I’m writing to tell you something about our newly-built Sunshine Health Center. I sincerely invite you to join me in taking exercise this weekend.

The center opens from 8:00 am to 9:00 pm and provides different physical exercises such as aerobic exercise, swimming and bowling. It’s equipped advanced and modern equipment, making it convenient and comfortable for sports fans. What I want to stress is that there are excellent coaches ready to help you, who can offer you professional guidance when you want to build up your body and keep fit.

Welcome to join me and enjoy a good time in the center this weekend? I’d appreciate it if you reply to me at your earliest convenience to let me know whether you will come or not.

Yours

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文，要求寫一封信。

第1步：根據(jù)提示可知，本篇為一封書信，假設(shè)你是李華。請(qǐng)寫信向外教Mr. Brown介紹你校新建的陽(yáng)光健身中心，并邀請(qǐng)他周末一起來鍛煉健身。內(nèi)容包括：1.開放時(shí)間；2. 健身項(xiàng)目；3. 服務(wù)設(shè)施。時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

第2步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關(guān)鍵詞（組），如：invite sb. to do sth.邀請(qǐng)某人做某事，physical exercises體育運(yùn)動(dòng)，convenient 方便的， comfortable舒適的，professional專業(yè)的， guidance指導(dǎo)，build up增強(qiáng)，keep fit保持（身體）健康，appreciate感謝。

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問題。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

亮點(diǎn)說明：作者在范文中使用了較多高級(jí)表達(dá)方式，如：What I want to stress is that there are excellent coaches ready to help you, who can offer you professional guidance when you want to build up your body and keep fit. 主語(yǔ)從句和定語(yǔ)從句的運(yùn)用；I’d appreciate it if you reply to me at your earliest convenience to let me know whether you will come or not.賓語(yǔ)從句的運(yùn)用。本文內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。另外全文中沒有中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語(yǔ)的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。