Question

12．假如你是某國(guó)際學(xué)校高中生李華，最近你發(fā)現(xiàn)學(xué)校圖書館閱覽室存在高聲喧嘩和亂丟垃圾的現(xiàn)象．請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)給圖書館館長(zhǎng)Mr．David寫一封信，要點(diǎn)如下：
1．說(shuō)明寫信目的；
2．提出合理建議．
注意：1．短文詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開頭和結(jié)尾己給出，不計(jì)入總次數(shù)．
Dear Mr．David，
I am Li Hua，a student from Class Five，Senior Three．Recently，I went to the library．I found some bad behaviors．Therefore，I am writing with the purpose of giving some suggestions，which，I hope，would be of some help to create a better environment for readers．（高分句型一）
I noticed some students talking and laughing，whose behaviors badly disturbed other students'study．（高分句型二）What's worse，several students were even eating snacks and throwing rubbish everywhere．Library is a public place where we gain knowledge and relaxation．So rules should be made to restrict people's behavior．Everyone should keep quiet in the reading room．In addition，eating and littering should be forbidden there．Only in this way can we create a clean and tidy place to make students feel comfortable staying there．（高分句型三）
Thank you for your consideration．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假如你是某國(guó)際學(xué)校高中生李華，最近你發(fā)現(xiàn)學(xué)校圖書館閱覽室存在高聲喧嘩和亂丟垃圾的現(xiàn)象．請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)給圖書館館長(zhǎng)Mr．David寫一封信，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：說(shuō)明寫信目的；提出合理建議． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：Therefore因此；with the purpose of 有什么樣的目的；be of some help 有些幫助；What's worse而且；In addition另外；in this way以這種方式；
Therefore，I am writing with the purpose of giving some suggestions，which，I hope，would be of some help to create a better environment for readers．（高分句型一）
  I noticed some students talking and laughing，whose behaviors badly disturbed other students'study．（高分句型二）
Only in this way can we create a clean and tidy place to make students feel comfortable staying there．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr．David，
       I am Li Hua，a student from Senior Three．Recently，I went to the library．I found some bad behaviors．Therefore，I am writing with the purpose of giving some suggestions，which，I hope，would be of some help to create a better environment for readers．（高分句型一）
       I noticed some students talking and laughing，whose behaviors badly disturbed other students'study．（高分句型二）What's worse，several students were even eating snacks and throwing rubbish everywhere．Library is a public place where we gain knowledge and relaxation．So rules should be made to restrict people's behavior．Everyone should keep quiet in the reading room．In addition，eating and littering should be forbidden there．Only in this way can we create a clean and tidy place to make students feel comfortable staying there．（高分句型三）
        Thank you for your consideration．
                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                            Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．