Question

12．假定你是高中生李華．你班同學(xué)決定舉行班級春游．請你寫一封郵件邀請外教Susan參加，要點包括：
1．時間：4月22日早8點北門出發(fā)；下午5點公園入口處集合返校；
2．地點：東湖綠道；
3．內(nèi)容安排：綠道騎自行車；戶外野餐（食物自備）；小組自由活動．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右，開頭語已為你寫好；
2．可以適當(dāng)添加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
參考詞匯：東湖綠道 The East Lake Greenway
Hi Susan，
We're planning a spring outing for the whole class．
We'd like to invite you to join us in this activity．
Regarded as the most beautiful greenway with its breath-taking scenery，the East Lake Greenway has become a hot tourist attraction of Wuhan．（高分句型一）Therefore，we decide to organize the spring outing there．We'll gather at the school North Gate at 8 am on April 22nd．After our arrival at the Greenway，the whole class will be divided into several groups．Riding bikes along the way，taking photos and having an outdoor picnic are what on our schedule．（高分句型二）You can join whichever groups to experience fun and excitement．Oh，one more thing，don't forget to show up at 5 pm，when we gather to go back to school together at the entrance of the Cherry Blossom Garden．（高分句型三）
It will be nice to have a good time with you in the spring outing．Expecting your reply and your coming as well．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假定你是高中生李華．你班同學(xué)決定舉行班級春游．請你寫一封郵件邀請外教Susan參加，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：（1）時間：4月22日早8點北門出發(fā)；下午5點磨山櫻園入口處集合返校；（2）地點：東湖綠道；（3）內(nèi)容安排：綠道騎行；戶外野餐（食物自備）；小組自由活動． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：therefore因此；show up出現(xiàn)，露面；have a good time過的愉快；Regarded as the most beautiful greenway with its breath-taking scenery，the East Lake Greenway has become a hot tourist attraction of Wuhan．（高分句型一） 
Riding bikes along the way，taking photos and having an outdoor picnic are what on our schedule．（高分句型二）Oh，one more thing，don't forget to show up at 5 pm，when we gather to go back to school together at the entrance of the Cherry Blossom Garden．（高分句型三）

解答 Hi Susan，
       We're planning an spring outing for the whole class．We'd like to invite you to join us in this activity． 
       Regarded as the most beautiful greenway with its breath-taking scenery，the East Lake Greenway has become a hot tourist attraction of Wuhan．（高分句型一）Therefore，we decide to organize the spring outing there．We'll gather at the school North Gate at 8 am on April 22nd．After our arrival at the Greenway，the whole class will be divided into several groups．Riding bikes along the way，taking photos and having an outdoor picnic are what on our schedule．（高分句型二）You can join whichever groups to experience fun and excitement．Oh，one more thing，don't forget to show up at 5 pm，when we gather to go back to school together at the entrance of the Cherry Blossom Garden．（高分句型三） 
        It will be nice to have a good time with you in the spring outing．Expecting your reply and your coming as well． 
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．