Question

【題目】假設(shè)你要參加所在年級的英文寫作比賽，請按如下要求完成下面短文：

1．簡要描述下圖內(nèi)容，并點明主題；

2．聯(lián)系實際，表達該圖帶給我們的啟示。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

參考詞匯：急救中心the Medical Emergency

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Answer 1

【答案】A little kid fell into the lake while she was playing with her little friends.They were too frightened to know what to do next.Luckily, a teenage girl and a pretty lady passed by and saw the drowning girl.The lady dived into the water and took the kid to the bank with difficulty and at the same time, the teenage girl called the Medical Emergency Center in time.Before the ambulance came, the lady who proved to be a nurse later performed first aid to the kid.A few minutes later, the kid was taken into the nearest hospital at once and was saved.The story is a good example in which first aid makes a big difference.From it, we know it is necessary to know basic first aid skills so that we can be better prepared for an emergency.

【解析】本文屬于圖畫作文。圖畫作文的寫作要領(lǐng)：1、根據(jù)提示，準(zhǔn)確審題。要注意文體，人物和時態(tài)。2、認真讀圖，把握情境，進行圖文轉(zhuǎn)換。這是關(guān)鍵。要根據(jù)圖畫中的人物及背景，確定人物之間，人物與背景之間的關(guān)系。從整體上把握所呈現(xiàn)的主要內(nèi)容，圍繞特定的主題合理想象。然后將圖畫所傳達的信息以文字的形式呈現(xiàn)出來，并對轉(zhuǎn)換后的內(nèi)容重新組合，確定主要內(nèi)容。 3、發(fā)表感想。圍繞主題展開合理的想象，發(fā)表自己的聯(lián)想或感想。4、確定段落，擬好提綱，斟酌詞句，組句成文。

亮點分析：文章要點齊全，寫作層次清楚，以時間順序展開全文，能緊扣圖片要點，上下文連貫。在表達句式上，注意了句式結(jié)構(gòu)的多變，既有主動語態(tài)又用被動語態(tài)。既簡單句又了復(fù)雜句，還有大量的復(fù)合句，如定語從句，狀語從句和常用句型，句式靈活生動而豐富多彩。固定短語的的使用，如fall into；dived into ；make a big difference；perform first aid to；beprepared for等，簡單中不乏顯示出較強的基本功和語言運用能力。所運用的句型如下：

文中運用了復(fù)雜句：Before the ambulance came, the lady who proved to be a nurse later performed first aid to the kid.（復(fù)雜句有一個狀語從句Before the ambulance came，和一個定語從句the lady who proved to be a nurse later performed first aid to the kid）。另外還有狀語從句A little kid fell into the lake while she was playing with her little friends。 定語從句：The story is a good example in which first aid makes a big difference。結(jié)果狀語從句：we know it is necessary to know basic first aid skills so that we can be better prepared for an emergency。 同時還運用Too…to…固定結(jié)構(gòu)：They were too frightened to know what to do next.還有被動語態(tài)：A few minutes later, the kid was taken into the nearest hospital at once and was saved.